Shrouded in a mist
Clouded by fate
The sky of my dreams
is beyond the gate
Amidst the transparent hue
It gives me a view
Of the canvas I painted
I wonder what that is
Those black lines across the art
Are they tears mixed with pain
Or did I use black paint
Where are the colors
Those strokes of valor
The outline and the shimmer
Alas, there is no glimmer
Nonchalantly it tells me
" You will now see
The canvas get ruptured
The dream get butchered "
At the altar of life
Hope is forfeited
No longer a dream
Is left to be greeted
Amidst this ritual
Where life tore the fabric
The killing is mutual
Life too is vanquished
As I fall into the abyss
Perhaps never to return
On my lips is a final wish
To once more see the sun
Can I wipe off the stains
Can I gather the remains
Washing away the guilt
Can I unfracture what I built
16 eulogies: on "Life No More"
:( your poem makes me sad, saim :(
* You will now see
The canvas get ruptured
The dream get butchered "
no i want my dreams pristine and clear, please
That's well-written.Guess you are feeling a li'l blue these days. :)
Can I wipe off the stains
Can I gather the remains
Washing away the guilt
Can I unfracture what I built
ah the questions remain.. :(
Rane
ur poem made me said. The way u put d lines its very touchy...
@Rat
May all ur wishes come true...may ur dreams always be pristine and pure and may they all come true:)
@Samadrita
Thanks:)
Yeah, blue does seem to be following me dese days:D
@Kajal
Haan yaar, they always remain:(
@Rimz
Thanks:)
Btw...welcome to my space, hope to see u here more often!!!
Wow..amazing use of words.
Loved the poem..Specially the first three para
Whoa!! Came on blogspot after eternity.. and was wondering what kept me away for so long..
This is achingly beautiful...
Makes me want to paint.. and keep painting.. till I run out of colors
Beautiful.........
Each line has a deep meaning within...
That was so profound and deep!
You started it on a diff. note and ended it with another! I mean, why did you divert midway? Had you been able to continue with the flow and ended the poem somewhere midway, I guess it would have seemed more deep. Nevertheless, this was just what I felt, nothing serious :P
u sad saim?? hmmmmm!!! CHEER UP!!! loved teh simplicity, its dark but who said dark is bad?? its nice sometimes.....
At the altar of life
Hope is forfeited
No longer a dream
Is left to be greeted
beautiful :)
Shrouded in a mist
Clouded by fate
The sky of my dreams
is beyond the gate
very well said dude when i read for the first time frankly i didn't understand wat u r trying to say cuz the word u used is anonymous to me but after going through the dictionary,gradually i understand,the first stanza which i like the most.To understand ur language is beyond my imagination ur english is just fantastic.
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